Topic: The Final Chris Grim Story (Announcement and Discussion)

[ChrisGrim]

Alright, I have a new vision for this that I'm working on and have mostly planned out. I decided that the story, while it opens as a mission to Dark Jedi and finding Nimora, is also about tying up loose ends and putting Chris in a good place leading up to his death.

He'll run into old companions, learn new things, and get the closure he needs to peacefully let go.

I've also somewhat created a new force technique which is essentially a force lightning bomb. It's not special, it's not something that only Grim can do (as he explains), and it's not meant to show him to be uber. It's a technique he comes up with while trying to do something else and it's one that he believes anyone can learn if they wanted to.

The issue being that it pretty much kills everything in a 100-foot radius so... who would want to?

This is likely my final story in the CG chronicles. I love the character and I love the story but it's time to end it. He's 44 now and the longer I wait the harder it will be for me to end him.

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

Scheisse, didn't notice this.
I will read it and share my thoughts (complain most likely

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

Naturally 

So, I've been working on the later chapters, planning it all out, and it looks like this is how the story will end. Seems fitting the way it plays out. I've also been working on the physics and concept of the force bomb so I can explain how it is done, why it's powerful, why anyone can use it but no one has (beyond being suicidal), and why it's more powerful for stronger jedi/sith than others. I decided I had to get it all worked out because there is bound to be someone who complains about it and asks for it to be explained beyond just the concept.

[*<JO>*Veniku Dar Adias]

Scheisse, didn't notice this.
I will read it and share my thoughts (complain most likely

Regards,
Menelaos

menelaos if you like food, you should try being a food critic if you dont mind typing... be a good hobbie for ya.

Nah nothing wrong with pointing stuff out. I agree tho seems like a story already told... err a couple of times. nonetheless great work tho i read most of it and was a great story is making me wanna go check out your past stories. Nice work grim.

[ChrisGrim]

So, even though I'm effectively killing my character I've noticed a dramatic lack of stories for him. He has stories between 12-14 and this one at 44 but nothing in between. I'm going to change that.

I'm planning to do the complete Grim Chronicles including making up missions, recapping some that we RP'ed that I remember, also including a couple meaningful training sessions as filler. Trials (which I always intended to write) will be brought up and stylize since I failed so miserably through them (lol). I'm going to expand the Chris/Vroxil/Mikeman story since it's sort of A-B-Z right now.

I'm also going to write his fall to the Dark Side, rewrite it to be more specific because I don't like the way I did it in the first place. I can't find it anyways so that's helpful. Going to write a few missions there too that I had going before Drake-tar deleted the website. And of course his comeback to the Jedi.

My goal is to have one story for every four or five years between 12 and 44. Some stretches will have more but every five years will at least have one. Still, maybe I can bring a bit of activity here, give the forum viewers something to read.

Oh, speaking of, does anyone remember around what time Drake-tar, Myste, and I left? It'll just help for the authenticity is all. It's hard to keep dates straight when 500+ of your posts are unavailable to you because of restrictions on what parts of the forum you can view. Going to have to rely heavily on people in the clan to help me keep certain things straight, please and thank you.

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

You know what would set you story trully aside from all other stories ever written?
If you concentrated on the little things, such as your training, your saber building, your first time using force powers, your learning/findings in classes, etc.

If its all about martyrdom, struggle with the dark side, need for revenge, etc then it has all been done before. I am not suggesting there is none of this in your story, but I would much rather read something that has not been written over and over.

Make it personal, speak of relationships (more than just the love of your life), how did you feel about taht other Padawan you always competed with, was there someone who stood out and helped you through things, did you have a fav subject, did you idolize any Masters, any missions you were in (where you did NOT become the hero...again, overdone), etc.

Just some food for thought.

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

That's actually very much what I am considering when constructing the Chronicles timeline. I want to give a more in depth look into my characters mind and experiences as he grew up. What he thought of people, what he enjoyed, the things he did around the temple, the feelings he had, the first impressions he got of certain people, etc. I want to talk about tournaments within the Temple that he competed in and lost, what that did to his ego. The first time he actually met a former Master (it was Wooklyn, actually) and the conflicts he had internally between what he knew was right and what he instinctively did. I want to talk about his relationship with Zunin and the transition to you as his Master.

I basically intend to talk about everything. As much as I can remember. There will be the odd story that needs to follow the RP storyline less than the actual JKA portrayal. Some stories he'll have to be the hero or the victim, some training sessions he'll have to show great power and others he'll have to struggle with. When I talk about his fall I can't sugar coat or gloss over it so there will be a lot of the struggle, revenge, etc. but I also hope to explain more of the WHY than the WHAT.

Ultimately I have to walk the line between what I've written and what I've done and make it seamless. Some stories will be what you are looking for and others will have to be more of what I've been leading up to. I hope to find a balance.

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

Well, I'll be interested in reading them for 2 reasons:
1. You were my P and I am obviously going to be in them in one way or another
2. I enjoy reading well written stories

I just don't want you to follow the same "down the dark path" story that everyone does.

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

Well, since I just kind of left I wouldn't mind taking suggestions as to why he went down the Dark Path... Right now I have it written as the truth. The clan was inactive, I was getting bored with being the next forever-Padawan, I was fighting with more people than it was worth fighting with, and when Myste left I didn't see a reason to stay. That's what the general idea is because I'm basing it off of the RL truth, but I wouldn't mind a more stylized explanation if you have one.

EDIT: This is a brief look into Chapter Five where CG explains why he fell. Why Chris allowed Grim to take control (it's a multiple personality thing I toyed with). Still, I'll take suggestions and hold off posting.

   “Explain.”
   “The Jedi in my Temple had become complacent (inactivity). Because of that I knew that it would be near impossible to reach my goals (ranking). Further, as much as I shouldn’t have I wanted to become stronger, better at the things I knew my Temple was ill equipped to help me with (dueling). I was frustrated, angry even. All the time trying to prove myself was wasted when no one was even there to watch. All of this led to me needing a change (I wanted to roleplay a Sith) and Nimora’s leaving gave me that opening. My heart was never in the Evil. I didn’t enjoy a lot of it. The power was nice, the strength I felt, but it was false, really.
   “As a Jedi you fight against the more powerful Sith and Dark Jedi in the galaxy. You are always fighting strong opponents. In the Sith Order we were constantly killing civilians and thinning the herd of the weaker Dark Jedi’s. I was stronger, felt stronger, but only because we avoided the stronger fighters.”
   “With all those reasons to leave why did you come back to the Jedi?”
   “I’m not evil,” I said confused. I thought the reason would be self-explanatory. “While the Sith teachings and abilities were fascinating their approach left a lot to be desired. I allowed myself to experience it, tap into the power. It was liberating for a while but eventually I grew tired of always having to be angry and filled with hatred in order to be powerful. I realized there had to be a better way. I guess I just stopped being angry.
   “Besides, I had something to prove in the Jedi Order. I had to go back and try to prove myself once again.”
   “Always about you, isn’t it?”
   “As often as the situation allows it.”

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

My suggestion is stick to what you percieve the truth to be.
I am sure there will be those who disagree with your assesment, like me, but its not us writting the story about Grim. It is YOU writting it.

I am sure if I were to write the Grim story as I saw it, well it would be much different then as you saw it. So, in order to be true to yourself, write it as you feel it played out.

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

I would be a bit scared to see my story through your eyes, I'm sure. lol. I foresee a lot of "dude, just shut up and do what I tell you to do", lol.

That actually would make for a great story in the chronicles, come to think of it.

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

I'd be afraid to write it 
I don't expect to be seen through rose colored glasses in your stories based on how you left and what you said when you left, but I know things that were done/said that you don't so my story would be a little different based on what I know.

Anyway, its your story.

Do your thing and I will try to remain objective when I read it 

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

lol, obviously context changes things. If I knew the things I didn't the story would have a different ending. Before you run off, pick a planet, any planet. Trying to plan out a mission or two.

[*<JO>*Menelaos]

No clue!
Make planets up, mix your past 3 gf's names or something.
I don't know the SW planets other than the obvious ones.

Regards,
Menelaos

[ChrisGrim]

I told the Councilors that this forum is going to be completely full of my characters stories and I wasn't exaggerating. I have 17 stories planned as of right now and I'm thinking there's a few more to be planned.