Jedi Order -=Year 243=-
Jedi Order Temple => Other Star Wars stuff => Lore and Legend - Star Wars => : ChrisGrim July 14, 2007, 01:33 AM
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Discussion for my newest story.
It's going to be really long so I'm warning all of you. I'm still writing it, it'll take a bit to finish but I'll post more when I have it. I should have it completed tomorrow or the next day.
All the back story and character/scene development is a killer. But, I'm working on it.
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Im reading it, i like it. suits your personality well, but that makes sense as your writting it.
I loved the, THEE best lol, nice addition there.
Looking forward to more Mr.Padawan Grim!
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I'm finding this one easier to write, because I can make up the character traits of people myself--so I don't have to worry about overstepping someones character. A couple quick cameo's from you, the Council and Master Zunin is all I have to worry about, the rest is...Whatever I feel like them to be.
It also allows for me to create a character that rivals me in everything, including sarcasm.
I'm more worried about my next story for the simple fact that this one is just to push my dvelopment along as he grows up while the next is to push my story along.
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Took a little longer then I thought, but I'm two or so chapters away from finishing. I have some adjusting to do to the destriptions but the theme and all the major points are exactly how I want them to be, so... Enjoy, Ill finish the last couple chapters and post them.
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Before anyone says anything, I wasn't completely sure how the JO Councilors would address this situation, so I went for the RP ending. I could have individually messaged each of them asking, but that'd take weeks and I didn't feel like holding off the final chapter, lol.
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Yeah good story, nicely done.
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cool story, but some of that seems a little impossible
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Depends on what you're refering to as impossible. But, I know there is an explanation for all of the things that happened.
Council is evil, enclave for Guardian training, Chris capable of fighting a Councilor, Master Men and crew coming at the right time, no expaltion for Chris--all explainable.
Girl interested in Chris--that one I can't explain... lol.
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The whole fighting people about twice your size and have about 50 times more skill than you in dueling and more experience seemed quite impossible as your only a padawan of 13 years, sure your gifted but unless your thinking your some sort of god, you would of been crushed even with the help of your friend.
The falling 40ft to the ground from ontop of the enclave and surviving at 13 years of age? sure maybe from an older padawan but not someone who hasnt had quite a few years of training.
Its a good story to be sure but your a 13 year old padawan who, realistically, is not experienced with such things.
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The whole fighting people about twice your size and have about 50 times more skill than you in dueling and more experience seemed quite impossible as your only a padawan of 13 years, sure your gifted but unless your thinking your some sort of god, you would of been crushed even with the help of your friend.
The falling 40ft to the ground from ontop of the enclave and surviving at 13 years of age? sure maybe from an older padawan but not someone who hasnt had quite a few years of training.
Its a good story to be sure but your a 13 year old padawan who, realistically, is not experienced with such things.
heh, well, it's debatable if they have 50x my, or anyones skill. Age does not dictate ability, especially when it comes to saber. And, if you'd noticed, it wasn't like Chris did a lot of fighting back... Mostly running. Nevertheless, it is entirely possible for a Padawan of 13-years to stand toe-to-toe with a Master... Especially when that Master has been ordered not to kill said Padawan... But, that's for my next story to explain.
Well, I don't know about not surviving... Chris has about 5-years of training, and while it would have hurt, it wouldn't have done great damage. Next time your in-game, find a high ledge and fall... Keep in mind that when writing these stories we have to take into account RP character and JKA character.
Next story (which I'm planning now) will go a long way in explaining some things from this, and the previous story.
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yeah you get hurt when you fall off a high ledge